Unlikely snow patch
Hunched in grasses’ slim shadows,
Slip off your white coat.
2013
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Hey e,
I considered other verbs there, first “Take off” but decided I’d go with “Slip” to keep the snow personified and also maintain sound resonance. Thanks for the suggestion. Your insight is always welcome.
I may be way off, but I’m wondering whether the closing line of this haiku could also read, Drip off your white coat….
Hey e,
I considered other verbs there, first “Take off” but decided I’d go with “Slip” to keep the snow personified and also maintain sound resonance. Thanks for the suggestion. Your insight is always welcome.